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Real resume example and fixes that took this resume from being rejected for 9 months to landing interviews and an offer. You can access the exact resume template I used for mid and senior level roles with step-by-step instructions and examples for each section or you can have me write your resume for you. Details are available from my profile. #resumeexample #resumetips #cvexample #cvtips #jobhunting
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This resume got rejected for 9 months, while this resume for the same exact person got multiple interviews within two weeks and a job offer within 60 days. And I'm gonna show you the three reasons why. So the first reason has to do with the professional summary. This after version has a much shorter summary because that avoids pushing down the work experience, which is the most important part of the resume that recruiters and hiring managers are going to focus on. There's no need to add this much detail. Keep it to two to three sentences max. The next key change has to do with the experience section. This version has a total of five different jobs, the oldest job going back to 2011. This after version works much better because it only lists the three most recent roles that are senior and most relevant to the roles that they were targeting. In this case, the older roles were still included on the resume under an additional work experience section without bullet points. That approach is optional, you can just leave that off. But most important thing to take away is that you wanna expand on your most recent and relevant roles. And another change to note was to the skill section. You can see here that the after version has a much more extensive skill section categorised into three different categories. And this is really helpful, especially now that most companies are using applicant tracking systems to Scan resumes and are looking for keywords that match the job posting. If you wanna apply these strategies to your resume, you can access these exact resume templates for mid and senior level roles. Or you can help me write your resume for you. All the details are available from my profile.
Hook analysis
brand_fit: with_changes“This resume got rejected for 9 months, while this resume for the same exact person got multiple interviews within two weeks and a job offer within 60 days.”
Pattern
receipt
Format
screen_walkthrough
Topic
resume-not-working
Sub-topic
before/after resume rewrite fixes
Content angle
the resume was rejected for structure, not for the person's experience
CTA
Get the mid/senior resume templates or have her write your resume — link in profile
Narrative structure
before/after receipt -> three named fixes with reasons -> product CTA
AU transplant
yes
Transplant note
Structure carries fully: same-person before/after, then three specific fixes (short summary, only 3 most recent relevant roles, categorised skills for ATS keywords). Nothing country-specific — no visa law, no US salary bands. For an AU internationally-trained audience you'd add the local layer Ark owns: overseas roles that recruiters can't calibrate, how to present a 2011 offshore title against an AU job ad, and survival-job placement on the page.
Brand fit note
Structure is strong for Ark: opens cold with a receipt, has real mechanisms (summary pushes work experience down; expand recent/relevant roles; keyword-categorised skills for ATS), and counts things (9 months, 2 weeks, 60 days, 3 roles, 2-3 sentences) which satisfies the 'at least one number' check. Two problems. First, 'Unverified outcome numbers' — the 9-months-to-offer-in-60-days claim cannot ship unless that case is in the proof bank. Second, the fixes as written could be said verbatim by a generic career coach ('keep it to two to three sentences max'), which fails the 'could a career coach have written this' check — needs subdivision teaching (what kind of role you're targeting changes which three roles you keep) and contempt pointed at the system (universities and free resume advice teaching the 5-job chronological dump). CTA must become Ark's own offer, not a template shop.
Why it performed
Not written yet.